Dizimz's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Menai Chronicles: Reclaimation Teaser]

Well shit dude if you needed proof reading you could always send me a transcript.
I might not have time to play through a whole game but i can def do a proof read.

If i could give some unsolicited advice too, when it comes to trailers. Less is more in the future try to reach that 1:30 mark. Best of Luck

Blackan responds:

Thanks Diz, I could use a proof reader/ spell checker
I'll try and keep it shorter next time XD

[Dual Arms V. P1 Trailer]

What to say?

Well supreme effort, i mean it efforts showing quite a bit
I did notice the art lacking in some aspects as opposed to others.

Its the type of thing that I notice lol, hey did you draw some of the areas through photoshop?, or was it all flash? The reason why I ask is I have drawn a lot of graphics via flash and saved them as pngs to edit via photoshop. You can get really organic effects which you might find helpful in your endevors .

The otherthing I might suggest is practicing human faces on a variety of angles. I notiiced you had some troubles on certain angles. which makes it hard to firmly establish a style. Its nothing to be ashamed of though, faces are hard to do. Human anatomy gave me lots of trouble.

Now this trailer is like 7 months old so im sure you ironed out your skills some more. Bravo might I add, ;)

Consistency is the hardest freaking part of doing art. a couple locales struck me as hastefully drawn like the establishing shot of the train.

What I believed was the interior was much more detailed.

There is a couple of lighting issues but no ones perfect,

mainly I noticed some bad/useful habits
alot of the shots of the characters didnt show the eyes lol. Its not a jab at you a lot of animaters do cheap stunts myself included Were you have a dark shadow or hair covering one of two eyes for instance.

This is because it can be difficult to draw eyes...period esepcially two somewhat symmetrical eyes. Its a headache sometimes.

But yeah I noticed one character had what seemed to be extremely wide eyes compared to the others. and a lot of characters had shadows, or the camera itself hiding the upper half of their face.

Now whether or not this is a technique you are using to create mystery Im not 100% sure of, however. The eyes nose and hair are usually the main things our minds train to establish differences in characters.

I suppose what im trying to say is the human mind typially feels like the shot is incomplete if the person in the center of it is cut off, know what I mean?

So just somethings to think about for the final product.

Which I hope helps get you to a 4.00 rating

3.5/5 for now

RPGsrok responds:

Some of these criticisms have been addressed in other reviews of course (what are you gonna do - seven months old XD) but they're still valid.

I don't do much editing in PS, though some backgrounds were scanned paintings I made. I understand that I am much lacking in anatomy and have been doing a little work improving (not enough of course).

I guess you weren't aware, but THE FINAL MOVIE IS OUUUUT!!!! xD It has indeed netted a score over 4, my highest yet. I'm quite proud of it, despite its flaws (which as I now know, are many). I suspect many of your complaints on that one won't differ very much from your observations here; indeed you may find the slow pace of the story annoying. Nonetheless, if you feel bored (it is a full 15 minutes long), I would love to know your opinions on the movie proper. If you need help finding it, don't hesitate to ask, but it shouldn't be that hard.

Watch it or not though, I appreciate you taking the time to watch and review this. My thanks!

[Dual Arms: Precipice]

not bad here is some constructive criticism.

first off your choice in music. FFX to zanarken?
well its a cool tune but as of now it is so overused its not funny. that soaks your originality.

on the scene where it zooms out from the train. it is disperportionate to the rest of the environment. nothing big just ruins what could be a good scene.

the japanese kanji. I gotta ask. did you use japanese font and simply type " dual arms" with it. if so that title kanji is more than likely incorrect.

also the obscure text being used. (japanese kanji probably), do you understand it yourself. Probably not right?
So maybe not do the japanese text. It can look cool but in this case it was tacky.

The rest is decent. Nothing i can criticise directly. Just keep practicing.
and maybe change your username. to something other than RPGsROK. just me being picky, take no offense. Keep it as is. Just try to develop a more recognisable name. thats all

good times.

yours truely Dizimz

RPGsrok responds:

Thank you very much for reviewing. Yours was the lowest score, but the most constructive. I'll address your issues one by one.

I wasn't aware that "To Zanarkand" in particular was overused. Where have you heard it (other than in FFX)? I am aware, however, that "Misirlou" isn't the most original tune out there. Still, do you imply I should go for more obscure songs? That's fine actually, (but I have no experience in recording original tracks).

I know exactly what your talking about with the disproportions with the train. I'll fix that (maybe upload a new version later. . .) as best I can.

Okay, I admit to taking the semi-random kanji for the reservoir thing in the end, but I am proud to say the the Dual Arms "katakana" was translated by me personally, into the phonetic "dyuuru aamusu" as it should be. Nonetheless, I'll certainly refrain from writing stuff I really don't know in the future.

Finally, I agree that RPGsROK isn't the greatest name ever but I wasn't aware we could still change our usernames. If you can, please PM me if only to tell me how (could've sworn you couldn't change names since the site upgrade. . .)

Thanks a lot, the review was very helpful. (PS, Fear Unlimited 2 is awesome, keep it up)

[:Blobs 2- pt1 NightBrawl:]

submit to youtube but not here

Im sorry this sites for FLASH animations not movies.

Im sure soem was flash but youre invading our territory. Dont.

faceofdoomness responds:

I already did post them to youtube and knox does this kinda stuff too and he has created a big following. I mean there's even a claymation section in the archives and what not. So as of now claymation is considered a type of flash thanks to Knox and his Blue Klaymen.

-faceofdoomness

[Alex as Emo]

well ill tell ya this. The whole emo scene is old

Im sure you know what obvious flaws there are so i wont rub your face in it.

while there was moderate thought into this its too little too late.
What i mean is the emo make fun of scene is old now. Sure theyre still annoying but get with the times thats all.

Now as for real criticism the artwork was ridiculously sketchy, not sure if that was the point.

I see some techniques used like the letter reading animation. BUT it was kinda ruined by the over sketchy art.

As a tip, out line smooth lines in black or really dark colours. REALLY dark.

anyhow dont give up good luck next time

D-noob responds:

I am wery happy for your comment ;)
but it's like this, it's not a joke:

I had an task in my Multimedia course to do a first try flash movie about an emo girl.
So i had no choice but to do a flash movie about an emo girl...of ya know what i mean..
and this took me 2 weeks... got A+

My next project is going to be a LOT of better!
You will see what it is, and i even got an half a year to finish it
thanx for the comment ;)

[ButtMastas VIII]

it pains me to see poor quality

Its not that I dont like you , Its not that I dont like your cartoon
its the fact that uh hmmm

well tell me you didnt honestly expect a high rating right? the graphics were choppy oh who am I kidding the graphics were horrid (just being honest) and well is this not a direct insult to another cartoon ? thats not right
your lucky that this has a low score because , who ever it was that made "all NG fags must die" would tear on you instantly

Id say keep up the good and hard work but its not hard to bitch about other peoples work

overall you get points for almost nothing

come on man come on
Its bad enough that Ill will gets away with the rants
( I am not saying that foamy is bad either) just saying that flash cartoons that are not fully animated dont deserve full credit

rexCo responds:

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[Brennan's World Epi 3.1]

Great job Aussie

Oi I watched this on phrozenflame it was great :)
Keep it up and enjoi your winter

Blackan responds:

only thing that's missing is the Snow XD Thanks Dizimz

[Volcano]

meh , no real point to it

I see effort , though the graphics were sketchy , especially at the end at the canyon with the woot anywho I will vote 3 , I have seen way better and way worse

george-berry responds:

yeah, i can see what you mean. Ive got better animations in the pipeline, just i wanted to finish this.

[- Mullen FREESTYLE -]

I have a question

Besides the leap of faith , does mullen ever actually fall????????
really though I am not talking about little falls but like credit carding himself from a laser flip or face planting or something anyway great flash

Jestar responds:

Who the fuck doesnt. Except it would kind of be hard to credit card on a flatground fliptrick. Stationary.
~Jestar <3

[Yugayoh: The Movie Part 2]

meh

it hs its humor though I only saw about three episodes of that crappy show anyways , though I had about 70 cards and about 25 of them were shiney , point being whoever invented yugioh owes me about 35 dollars

EternitySpent responds:

Ok. This is quite possibly the strangest review I hace ever got.... Thanks for the 10 in humor... I try to look for the positives....